Exam Practice MARS 2007 Feel free to post your exercises here. I'm somewhat pressed for time at the moment, but I'll correct as many as I can. If you mail them to me directly, I'll post them without specifying the author.
Original
This article taken from "Die Presse" of 2 September 2006, discusses the development of current labor disputes at the Brazilian VW subsidiary. Specifically it gives a historical overview of the developments leading to compulsory vacations of 11.000 employees in the Brazilian factory. First the author points out that the appreciation of the Brazilian Real led to a dramatic downturn in exports. Moreover the government did not grant a loan to VW, because the company had not informed the government about planned dismissals. Second the author mentions that as a result of declining export volumes VW do Brasil decided to make 6000 employees redundant by 2008. Third he draws the reader's attention to the fact that the planned lay-offs led to a strike of about 12000 employees. An additional aspect the article addresses are the possible consequences for VW in Germany. To sum up one can say that the article shows the reader that success depends closely on the company's ability and willingness to cooperate with the government.
Korrektur
This article, taken from "Die Presse" of 2 September 2006, discusses the development of current labor disputes at the Brazilian VW subsidiary. Specifically, it gives a historical overview of the developments leading to compulsory vacations for 11,000 employees in the Brazilian factory. First, the author points out that the appreciation of the Brazilian Real led to a dramatic downturn in exports. Moreover, the government did not grant a loan to VW because the company had not informed the government about planned dismissals. Second, the author mentions that as a result of declining export volumes, VW do Brasil decided to make 6000 employees redundant by 2008. Third, he draws the reader's attention to the fact that the planned lay-offs led to a strike of about 12000 employees. An additional aspect the article addresses are the possible consequences for VW in Germany. To sum up, one can say that the article shows the reader that success depends closely on the company's ability and willingness to cooperate with the government.
Das ist eine absolut ausgezeichnete Zusammenfassung des Artikels. Die einzigen Ergänzungen meinerseits waren die Kommas. Ich ziehe zwar (in österreichischer Tradition) für ausgelassene Kommas im Sinne der obigen auf der Klausur keine Punkte ab, wenn Du mich aber sehr glücklich machen willst, dann über noch, dass nach Satzeinstiegen wie z.B. "First", "Moreover", "To sum up" usw. immer ein Komma kommt.
Re: Exam Practice MARS 2007 Original
This article, taken from "Die Presse" of 4 September 2006, discusses the legal consequences of discrimination against women in the workplace. Specifically it gives an overview of various lawsuits against companies with anti-women corporate cultures, especially in the financial sector. First the author points out that a female employee of the Deutsche Bank subsidiary in New York complained to the Equal Employment Opportunity Commission about unequal treatment at work as well as unfair payment compared to male colleagues. Second he emphasizes that class action suits concerning discrimination have a long tradition in America. The large US retailer Walmart faced many lawsuits concerning unequal payment and career opportunities. An additional aspect the author addresses is the amount of money saved by unequal payment in the financial sector. To sum up one can say that the article shows the reader that unequal treatment of women in the workplace does not pay in the long-run.
Korrektur
This article, taken from "Die Presse" of 4 September 2006, discusses the legal consequences of discrimination against women in the workplace. Specifically, it gives an overview of various lawsuits against companies with sexist corporate cultures, especially in the financial sector. First, the author points out that a female employee of the Deutsche Bank subsidiary in New York complained to the Equal Employment Opportunity Commission about unequal treatment at work as well as unfair payment compared to male colleagues. Second, he emphasizes that class action suits concerning discrimination have a long tradition in America. The large US retailer Walmart faced many lawsuits concerning unequal payment and career opportunities. An additional aspect the author addresses is the amount of money saved by unequal payment in the financial sector. To sum up, one can say that the article shows the reader that unequal treatment of women in the workplace does not pay in the long-run.
Wieder ausgezeichnet zusammengefasst!
1) "anti-women" ist zwar auch richtig, "sexist" ist aber der klassischere Begriff für frauenfeindliche Politik.
Re: Exam Practice MARS 2007 Original
The article to be summarized, was published in the daily newspaper „Die Presse“ on September 4th, 2006 and analyzes various aspects of the discrimination of female employees.
Most importantly, it provides an overview of different cases in which companies such as Deutsche Bank, Wal-Mart and DKW favour male over female employees in respect of salary and promotions for higher management jobs.
First the author points out that Deutsche Bank in NY is facing an lawsuit because a female employee complaint in 2005 about being treated unequally to male employees by means of getting less money for doing the same job as her male colleagues. Also, he explains a case where 1,6 million former Wal-Mart employees have joined a class-action lawsuit against their employer in 2001 based on an analysis which shows that in Wal-Mart less than 30% of all managers are female. Finally, he shows a recent sue in which six female employees of DKW bank complain on behalf of all female employees. Their lawyers claim up to 1,4 billion dollars.
An additional aspect the article addresses is that particularly the financial service providers are affected hardly as in this line of business the salaries are relatively high.
The central message of the article, therefore, is that even in the 21st century discrimination of female employees unfortunately is daily business.
Korrektur
The article to be summarized was published in the daily newspaper "Die Presse“ on September 4th, 2006 and analyzes various aspects of the discrimination of female employees.
Most importantly, it provides an overview of different cases in which companies such as Deutsche Bank, Wal-Mart and DKW have favoured male over female employees in respect of salary and promotions for higher management jobs.
First, the author points out that Deutsche Bank in NY is facing a lawsuit because a female employee complained in 2005 about being treated unequally to male employees as she received less money for doing the same job as her male colleagues. Also, he explains a case where 1.6 million former Wal-Mart employees joined a class-action lawsuit against their employer in 2001 based on an analysis which shows that in Wal-Mart, less than 30% of all managers are female. Finally, he discusses a recent lawsuit in which six female employees of DKW bank suedtheir employer on behalf of all female employees. Their lawyers are claiming up to 1.4 billion dollars.
An additional aspect the article addresses is that financial service providers are affected particularly strongly, as in this line of business, salaries are relatively high.
The central message of the article, therefore, is that even in the 21st century, discrimination of female employees unfortunately is daily business.
Auch gut und detailliert zusammengefasst:
1) "The article to be summarized, was published in the daily newspaper „Die Presse“ on September 4th, 2006": "The article to be summarized" ist zwar absolut gut, das Komma vor "was published" muss aber weg. Andere, ähnliche Einstiegsvarianten wären z.B. "The relevant article was published..." bzw. "The article in question was published..."
2) „Die Presse“ ACHTUNG, ACHTUNG! Dafür ziehe ich Punkte ab, und zwar gar nicht so wenig. Ich weiss nicht ob EZBoard die Anführungszeichen so wiedergibt wie im Mail, aber falls nicht, stehen sie im Original unten. Auf Englisch müssen sie auf beiden Seiten oben stehen und für einen Native Speaker sind untenstehende Anführungszeichen etwas total seltsames (nicht in die gleiche Rubrik einzuordnen wie z.B. fehlende Kommas).
3) "... in 2005 about being treated unequally to male employees by means of getting less money for doing the same job as her male colleagues." Dadurch, dass der Satz recht lang ist, wird er kompliziert und erfordert eigenwillige Strukturen. Ich nehme an, Du hast "by means of" verwendet, weil Du zuvor schon "because" hattest und das nicht doppelt verwenden wolltest. Sobald so eine Überlegung aufkommt, ist es sinnvoller, zwei Sätze daraus zu machen. Das geht relative leicht, in dem man Sturkturen wie "The reason for this is that..." bzw. "This led to the consequence that..." einübt; dann kann einem eigentlich wenig passieren. Hier würde z.B. passen: ""... in 2005 about being treated unequally to male employees. The reason for this was that she received less money for doing the same job as her male colleagues."
4) "1,6 million": ACHTUNG- hier bin ich ähnlich streng wie unter Punkt 2. Kommas und Punkte sind bei Zahlen auf Englisch im Regelfall umgekehrt (im Vergleich zur deutschen Sprache).
5) "he shows a recent": Bei Textzusammenfassungen ist es sicherer, auf "shows" zu verzichten. Es ist zwar in vielen Situationen absolut richtig, aber in vielen wiederum nicht und es gibt keine klare Faustregel dafür. Sicherer ist in jedem Fall "discusses".
6) "Their lawyers claim up to": Entweder "are claiming" oder "have claimed", weil es noch aktuell ist, aber nicht eine allgemeingültige Feststellung (Present Simple)
7) "An additional aspect the article addresses is that particularly the financial service providers are affected hardly ": Achtung: "Hardly" bedeutet "kaum", nicht "stark" ("strongly")
Pie Chart
This pie chart illustrates the proportion of consumer expenditures according to product categories. Most importantly, it shows that 32% of total expenditures are accounted for by housing, which represents an increase by 5% compared to the previous year. This is attributable to rising costs of heating and rent. Transportation costs amount to 18% of total expenditures, which can be traced back to the rocketing petrol prices. A further 9% of costs are attributable to personal insurance and pension. This high percentage is a result of the Austrians taking precautions for possible cuts in state pensions.
In conclusion, therefore, the pie chart shows a rather even breakdown of consumer expenditures according to product categories. For the reasons cited earlier, this breakdown implies that consumers should try to save money by reducing transportation and housing costs.
Graph
This graph displays the development of the market share of Hover Inc. on the European market between 1987 and 20, with the market share shown on the vertical axis and the years on the horizontal axis. As can be seen, the market share steadily rose by almost 7% from 1987 to 1990, where it peaked at nearly 31%. This is attributable to the general economic upswing and the lack of competition. In the following year there was a drop of 3% to 27% market share. This was a result of a defect of fabrication followed by a products recall on the German market. Even though the market share recovered and reached a peak at 29% in 1992, it steadily drifted to a mere 8% in 2002. This is a result of the growing competition on the saturated European market.
In conclusion, therefore, the graph shows a slightly turbulent negative development. For the reasons cited earlier, this development implies that management should enter new markets with high growth potential like the Eastern European countries.
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This pie chart represents the proportion of share in production costs of the new Sony TW5000Z according to the cost centres. Most importantly, the chart shows that 29% of the costs were accounted for by the development of the TV-station. The reason for this is that new and revolutionary technology was invented to make the sharpest vision ever possible. In contrast to this, administrative tasks contributed only 5% of overall costs. Due to the integration of the product specific administrative department into the general administrative department, costs could be reduced by 3% compared to the previous year. Moreover, 21% of overall costs were attributable to design. This can be traced back to the fact that according to a marketing research design is the number two priority of customers, right after superior quality. In conclusion, therefore, the pie chart shows a rather even breakdown of share in costs according to cost centres. For the reasons cited earlier, this breakdown implies that management should try to further minimise administrative costs and invest in design.
Is this summary too long?
This article analyses the effects of the cable car-accident in Kaprun on the Austrian compensation law. Specifically, it outlines the main events in context of the Austrian compensation law being criticised for not being casualties-friendly enough.
First, the author points out that there had been a meeting of 80 jurists from Austria, Germany and Great Britain in Innsbruck last weekend. The participants discussed which legal actions to take concerning damages after accidents with personal injuries like the one happened in Kaprun. There is a strong need for action due to the heavy pressure exerted on Austria by Ed Fagan, who is said to have already filed an action in New York in regards to Kaprun. Second, he maintains that the jurists fear that Austria’s legal system might develop according to the US-legal system. Already European lawyers try to find courts with favourable laws for their clients. Third, he draws the reader’s attention to the fact that the Austrian compensation law grants the families of casualties or the victims themselves only very little money for compensation, if something at all. On the contrary, Italian families who lost a member due to a cable car accident got a lot more damages for their loss, but German affiliates got even less in a similar case.
Aside from this main topic, the author also discusses the dispute about the minimum living time of an accident victim to entitle it to damages. In addition, he points out that verdicts reached in American can’t be executed in Austria.
The central message of the article, therefore, is that the Austrian compensation law is not endangered by the American law; nevertheless it needs to be changed to be more casualties-friendly.
..think that's enough for now
This article discusses the development of the economic performance of the Austrian ski manufacturer Atomic. Specifically, it gives an historical overview of how the general manager of Atomic, Michael Schineis, managed to bring the company from bankruptcy to being one of the most successful producers of winter sports equipment worldwide.
First, the author points out that after Atomic, a subsidiary of the Finnish sports article manufacturer Amer, went bankrupt in 1994 it almost did another time in 1997. Second, he maintains that through implementing a challenging and risky recapitalisation plan, within a minimum of time yearly turnover rocketed and increase by 80%. A side effect of the recapitalisation was that a production facility in Austria had to be shut down and 410 people were made redundant. Furthermore, he emphasises that several brands were eliminated, subsidiaries were closed and personnel was exchanged. Third, he mentions that Atomic today possesses a modern centre for development- and logistics and is technologically ahead of the competition. Aside from this, the author points out that the performance of Atomic very much resembles the one of Hermann Maier, an Austrian Olympic skier sponsored by Atomic. After his dreadful accident in Nagano in 1998, nobody thought he would ever ski again. Nevertheless he won the Olympic Games of Nagano.
Ultimately, therefore, the author points out that after an almost downfall of Atomic, the companies economic performance is better than ever before.
Bearbeitet von: bxl am: 9/13/06 19:46
Re: Pie ChartOriginal
This pie chart illustrates the proportion of consumer expenditures according to product categories. Most importantly, it shows that 32% of total expenditures are accounted for by housing, which represents an increase by 5% compared to the previous year. This is attributable to rising costs of heating and rent. Transportation costs amount to 18% of total expenditures, which can be traced back to the rocketing petrol prices. A further 9% of costs are attributable to personal insurance and pension. This high percentage is a result of the Austrians taking precautions for possible cuts in state pensions.
In conclusion, therefore, the pie chart shows a rather even breakdown of consumer expenditures according to product categories. For the reasons cited earlier, this breakdown implies that consumers should try to save money by reducing transportation and housing costs.
Korrektur
This pie chart illustrates the proportion of consumer expenditures according to product categories. Most importantly, it shows that 32% of total expenditures are accounted for by housing, which represents an increase by 5% compared to the previous year. This is attributable to rising costs of heating and rent. Transportation costs amount to 18% of total expenditures, which can be traced back to the rocketing petrol prices. A further 9% of costs are attributable to personal insurance and pension. This high percentage is a result of the Austrians taking precautions for possible cuts in state pensions.
In conclusion, therefore, the pie chart shows a rather even breakdown of consumer expenditures according to product categories. For the reasons cited earlier, this breakdown implies that consumers should try to save money by reducing transportation and housing costs.
Absolut perfekt! Tolle Arbeit.
1) Man kann Ausgaben sowohl als "expenditure" als auch als "expenditures" übersetzen. Beides ist richtig (d.h. nicht verunsichern lassen, falls ihr den Singular verwendet und oben keine Korrektur fandet).
Re: GraphOriginal
This graph displays the development of the market share of Hover Inc. on the European market between 1987 and 20, with the market share shown on the vertical axis and the years on the horizontal axis. As can be seen, the market share steadily rose by almost 7% from 1987 to 1990, where it peaked at nearly 31%. This is attributable to the general economic upswing and the lack of competition. In the following year there was a drop of 3% to 27% market share. This was a result of a defect of fabrication followed by a products recall on the German market. Even though the market share recovered and reached a peak at 29% in 1992, it steadily drifted to a mere 8% in 2002. This is a result of the growing competition on the saturated European market.
In conclusion, therefore, the graph shows a slightly turbulent negative development. For the reasons cited earlier, this development implies that management should enter new markets with high growth potential like the Eastern European countries.
Korrektur
This graph displays the development of the market share of Hover Inc. on the European market between 1987 and 2000, with the market share shown on the vertical axis and the years on the horizontal axis. As can be seen, the market share rose steadily by almost 7% from 1987 to 1990, where it peaked at nearly 31%. This is attributable to the general economic upswing and the lack of competition. In the following year, there was a drop of 3% to 27% market share. This was a result of a fabrication defect followed by a product's recall on the German market. Even though the market share recovered and reached a peak at 29% in 1992, it drifted steadily to a mere 8% in 2002. This is a result of the growing competition on the saturated European market.
In conclusion, therefore, the graph shows a slightly turbulent, negative development. For the reasons cited earlier, this development implies that our management should enter new markets with high growth potential like the Eastern European countries.
Ebenfalls spitze gelungen.
1) "steadily rose" ist zwar grammatikalisch völlig ok, ein Native Speaker würde aber eher "rose steadily" sagen.
2) "that management should": In so einem Fall würde man das Management zuordnen (z.B. "our", "your", oder falls dritte Person, zumindest "the")Bearbeitet von: GerhardFenkart am: 9/25/06 8:10
Original
This pie chart represents the proportion of share in production costs of the new Sony TW5000Z according to the cost centres. Most importantly, the chart shows that 29% of the costs were accounted for by the development of the TV-station. The reason for this is that new and revolutionary technology was invented to make the sharpest vision ever possible. In contrast to this, administrative tasks contributed only 5% of overall costs. Due to the integration of the product specific administrative department into the general administrative department, costs could be reduced by 3% compared to the previous year. Moreover, 21% of overall costs were attributable to design. This can be traced back to the fact that according to a marketing research design is the number two priority of customers, right after superior quality. In conclusion, therefore, the pie chart shows a rather even breakdown of share in costs according to cost centres. For the reasons cited earlier, this breakdown implies that management should try to further minimise administrative costs and invest in design.
Korrektur
This pie chart represents the proportion of production costs of the new Sony TW5000Z according to cost centres. Most importantly, the chart shows that 29% of the costs were accounted for by the development of a TV-station. The reason for this is that new and revolutionary technology was invented to make the sharpest picture ever possible. In contrast to this, administrative tasks contributed only 5% of overall costs. Due to the integration of the product specific administrative department into the general administrative department, costs could be reduced by 3% compared to the previous year. Moreover, 21% of overall costs were attributable to design. This can be traced back to the fact that according to marketing research, design is the number two priority of customers, right after superior quality. In conclusion, therefore, the pie chart shows a rather even breakdown of share in costs according to cost centres. For the reasons cited earlier, this breakdown implies that your management should try to further minimise administrative costs and invest in design.
Toll geschrieben und begründet.
1)"the proportion of share in production costs of the new Sony TW5000Z according to the cost centres": Das "according to the cost centres" macht das "of share in" unnötig/unpassend.
2) "of the TV-station": Hier passt "the" nur, wenn der Leser eindeutig weiss, um welchen TV-Sender es sich handelt. Sonst muss man unbestimmt bleiben, d.h. "a tv-station"
3) "according to a marketing research": "marketing research" immer ohne Artikel. Falls Du eine spezifische Studie betonen willst, nimm "to a market survey"
Re: Exam Practice MARS 2007 Original
This article analyses the effects of the cable car-accident in Kaprun on the Austrian compensation law. Specifically, it outlines the main events in context of the Austrian compensation law being criticised for not being casualties-friendly enough.
First, the author points out that there had been a meeting of 80 jurists from Austria, Germany and Great Britain in Innsbruck last weekend. The participants discussed which legal actions to take concerning damages after accidents with personal injuries like the one happened in Kaprun. There is a strong need for action due to the heavy pressure exerted on Austria by Ed Fagan, who is said to have already filed an action in New York in regards to Kaprun. Second, he maintains that the jurists fear that Austria’s legal system might develop according to the US-legal system. Already European lawyers try to find courts with favourable laws for their clients. Third, he draws the reader’s attention to the fact that the Austrian compensation law grants the families of casualties or the victims themselves only very little money for compensation, if something at all. On the contrary, Italian families who lost a member due to a cable car accident got a lot more damages for their loss, but German affiliates got even less in a similar case.
Aside from this main topic, the author also discusses the dispute about the minimum living time of an accident victim to entitle it to damages. In addition, he points out that verdicts reached in American can’t be executed in Austria.
The central message of the article, therefore, is that the Austrian compensation law is not endangered by the American law; nevertheless it needs to be changed to be more casualties-friendly.
Korrektur
This article analyses the effects of the cable car-accident in Kaprun on Austrian compensation law. Specifically, it outlines the main events in context of Austrian compensation law, which is criticised for not being casualties-friendly enough.
First, the author points out that there had been a meeting of 80 jurists from Austria, Germany and Great Britain in Innsbruck last weekend. The participants discussed which legal actions to take concerning damages after accidents with personal injuries like the one that took place in Kaprun. In the particular case of Kaprun, the author pointed out that there is a strong need for action due to the heavy pressure exerted on Austria by Ed Fagan, who is said to have already filed an action in New York in regards to Kaprun. Second, he maintains that the jurists at the meeting fear that Austria’s legal system might develop into a system that is more similar to the US-legal system. European lawyers are already trying to find courts based in countries with favourable laws for their clients. Third, he draws the reader’s attention to the fact that the Austrian compensation law grants the families of casualties or the victims themselves only very little money for compensation, if anything at all. In contrast, Italian families who lost a member due to a cable car accident received a lot more damages for their loss. But then again, German affiliates received even less in a similar case.
Aside from this main topic, the author also discusses the dispute about the minimum living time of an accident victim that must be met to entitle the victim to damages. In addition, he points out that verdicts reached in the USA can’t be executed in Austria.
The central message of the article, therefore, is that the Austrian compensation law is not endangered by the American law; nevertheless it needs to be changed to become more casualties-friendly.
Länge scheint hier absolut passend und Du hast einen recht komplizierten Artikel gut nachvollziehbar zusammengefasst. Ich habe den Artikel selbst nicht gesehen (ist das eventuell der Artikel aus dem uralt-Skriptum?), d.h. weiss ich nicht, wie detailliert die Gesamtinfo zusammengefasst wurde, aber es liest sich auf jeden Fall sehr "plausibel".
1) "on the Austrian compensation law": Wenn es um einen Rechtsbereich geht (und nicht um ein bestimmtes Gesetz), verzichtet man eher auf den Artikel (d.h. "on Austrian compensation law" aber "in the Austrian Civil Code"). Es ist zwar meistens ok, "the" zu lassen, aber ohne ist auf jeden Fall flüssiger.
2) "Already European lawyers try": Einer jener Situationen, wo ein Komma wichtig ist. "Already" geht hier nur vor "European lawyers", wenn beide durch Komma von einander abgegrenzt sind (d.h. "Already, European lawyers are trying...")
3) "On the contrary,": Das heisst "Im Gegenteil", NICHT "Im Gegensatz dazu" (wäre "In contrast,")
Re: ..think that's enough for nowOriginal
This article discusses the development of the economic performance of the Austrian ski manufacturer Atomic. Specifically, it gives an historical overview of how the general manager of Atomic, Michael Schineis, managed to bring the company from bankruptcy to being one of the most successful producers of winter sports equipment worldwide.
First, the author points out that after Atomic, a subsidiary of the Finnish sports article manufacturer Amer, went bankrupt in 1994 it almost did another time in 1997. Second, he maintains that through implementing a challenging and risky recapitalisation plan, within a minimum of time yearly turnover rocketed and increase by 80%. A side effect of the recapitalisation was that a production facility in Austria had to be shut down and 410 people were made redundant. Furthermore, he emphasises that several brands were eliminated, subsidiaries were closed and personnel was exchanged. Third, he mentions that Atomic today possesses a modern centre for development- and logistics and is technologically ahead of the competition. Aside from this, the author points out that the performance of Atomic very much resembles the one of Hermann Maier, an Austrian Olympic skier sponsored by Atomic. After his dreadful accident in Nagano in 1998, nobody thought he would ever ski again. Nevertheless he won the Olympic Games of Nagano.
Ultimately, therefore, the author points out that after an almost downfall of Atomic, the companies economic performance is better than ever before.
Korrektur
This article discusses the development of the economic performance of the Austrian ski manufacturer Atomic. Specifically, it gives an historical overview of how the general manager of Atomic, Michael Schineis, managed to bring the company from bankruptcy to being one of the most successful producers of winter sports equipment worldwide.
First, the author points out that after Atomic, a subsidiary of the Finnish sports article manufacturer Amer, had already gone bankrupt in 1994, it almost did so another time in 1997. Second, he maintains that through implementing a challenging and risky recapitalisation plan, within a minimum of time, yearly turnover rocketed and increase by 80%. A side effect of the recapitalisation was that a production facility in Austria had to be shut down and 410 people were made redundant. Furthermore, he emphasises that several brands were eliminated, subsidiaries were closed and personnel was exchanged. Third, he mentions that Atomic today possesses a modern centre for development- and logistics and is technologically ahead of the competition. Aside from this, the author points out that the performance of Atomic very much resembles that of Hermann Maier, an Austrian Olympic skier sponsored by Atomic. After his dreadful accident in Nagano in 1998, nobody thought he would ever ski again. Nevertheless he won the Olympic Games of Nagano.
Ultimately, therefore, the author points out that after a near downfall of Atomic, the company's economic performance is better than ever before.
Toll! Auch hier kenne ich den Originalartikel nicht, aber es scheint mir alles sehr schlüssig und in einem sehr eleganten Englisch zusammengefasst worden zu sein. Was mir an diesem Text besonders gefallen hat, ist wie gut Du mit Kommas umzugehen weisst (etwas, was an den österreichischen Mittelschulen stark vernachlässigt wird).
Re: ..think that's enough for nowOriginal
This graph shows the development of the share price of Andritz AG between August 2001 and August 2006, with the share price shown on the vertical axis and the years on the horizontal axis. As can be seen the share price amounted to 380 euros in August 2001. In the following year the share price plummeted to 220 euros. The reason for this all-time low is that a new strong competitor entered the market. Thereafter, the share price recovered slightly. This can be traced back to the fact that the board of directors appointed a new CEO with a first-rate reputation. In August 2005 the share price reached a peak and amounted to 450 euros. This is a result of the introduction of a new innovative product.
In conclusion, therefore, the graph shows a turbulent positive development. For the reasons specified earlier, this development suggests that investors should buy shares of Andritz AG.
Korrektur
This graph shows the development of the share price of Andritz AG between August 2001 and August 2006, with the share price shown on the vertical axis and the years on the horizontal axis. As can be seen, the share price amounted to 380 euros in August 2001. In the following year, the share price plummeted to 220 euros. The reason for this all-time low is that a new strong competitor entered the market. Thereafter, the share price recovered slightly. This can be traced back to the fact that the board of directors appointed a new CEO with a first-rate reputation. In August 2005, the share price reached a peak and amounted to 450 euros. This was a result of the introduction of a new innovative product.
In conclusion, therefore, the graph shows a turbulent positive development. For the reasons specified earlier, this development suggests that investors should buy shares of Andritz AG.
Sprachlich hervorragend zusammengefasst. Bei den Begründungen würde ich bei der Prüfung noch weiter ausholen (siehe z.B. vergleichbare Begründungen weiter oben im Thread).
Re: ..think that's enough for nowOriginal
This pie chart shows the proportion of Tea Company's sales according to region. Most importantly, the chart shows that 39% of sales were accounted for by Great Britain. The reason for this is that the demand for tea is very high in Great Britain. As can be seen, Africa made up 7% of sales. In 2005 Africa contributed only 1% to sales. This positive development can be traced back to the fact that Tea Company started a very successful advertising campaign in Africa in 2006. Moreover, the pie chart shows that the USA and Canada amounted to 19% of sales. This is a result of the new intensive distribution strategy in these countries, by which Tea Company sells its products through as many distribution channels as possible.
In conclusion, therefore, the pie chart shows a strong influence of the demand in Great Britain in regards to sales. For the reasons specified earlier, this breakdown suggests that Tea Company should invest more resources in regions like Great Britain and emerging markets like Africa.
Korrektur
This pie chart shows the proportion of Tea Company's sales according to region. Most importantly, the chart shows that 39% of sales were accounted for by Great Britain. The reason for this is that the demand for tea is very high in Great Britain. As can be seen, Africa made up 7% of sales. In 2005, Africa contributed only 1% to sales. This positive development can be traced back to the fact that Tea Company started a very successful advertising campaign in Africa in 2006. Moreover, the pie chart shows that the USA and Canada amounted to 19% of sales. This is a result of the new intensive distribution strategy in these countries, by which Tea Company sells its products through as many distribution channels as possible.
In conclusion, therefore, the pie chart shows a strong influence of the demand in Great Britain in regards to sales. For the reasons specified earlier, this breakdown suggests that Tea Company should invest more resources in regions like Great Britain and emerging markets like Africa.
Sprachlich wieder spitze, bei Begründungen ebenfalls wieder etwas mehr ausholen (z.B. konkreter werden; was für eine Werbekampagne war es?)
Re: ..think that's enough for nowGerman Article Exporte boomen in China (www.derstandard.at 05. September 2006) 90 Prozent aller Handys, die weltweit vertrieben werden, kommen aus der Volksrepublik, 70 Prozent aller Spielzeugwaren, 50 Prozent aller Kameras und 40 Prozent aller Schuhe
Wien - "China ist eine Exportmaschine", sagte der österreichische Handelsdelegierte in Peking, Kurt Müllauer, am Dienstag in einer Pressekonferenz. 90 Prozent aller Handys, die weltweit vertrieben werden, kommen von dort, ebenso 70 Prozent aller Spielzeugwaren, 50 Prozent aller Kameras und 40 Prozent aller Schuhe. Die Importwelle rollt auch nach Österreich. Derzeit ist China bereits der viertgrößte Lieferant. "Und in wenigen Monaten wird das Land Platz drei - vor Frankreich - einnehmen", ist Müllauer überzeugt. "Die nächste Welle werden Möbel sein", sagt der Außenhandelsexperte der Wirtschaftkammer Österreich (WKO) voraus.
Gemeinsam mit Japan, Australien, Korea, Hongkong , Taiwan und Neuseeland wird China aber auch ein immer wichtigerer Abnehmer für österreichische Waren. Die Exporte nach Fernost und Australien haben im ersten Halbjahr um fast 17 Prozent auf 2,13 Mrd. Euro überdurchschnittlich zugelegt. In der Region stechen China und Japan als die stärksten Magnete für heimische Produkte hervor. "Das ist die Region, wo die Musik spielt", betont der Leiter der Außenwirtschaft Österreich (AWO) in der Wirtschaftskammer (WKO), Walter Koren. Denn überdurchschnittliche Wachstumsraten seien dort auch in den kommenden Jahrzehnten zu erwarten.
Agrressive Preispolitik
Unter dem Strich stiegen die Importe aus der Region Fernost und Australien jedenfalls beachtlicher als die österreichischen Ausfuhren dorthin. Der Wert der Einfuhren erhöhte sich in den ersten sechs Monaten um fast 22 Prozent auf 3,6 Mrd. Euro. Daraus ergibt sich ein Außenhandelsminus von fast 1,5 Mrd. Euro für die Österreicher. Tendenz weiter steigend. Der Warenstrom von China nach Österreich ist schon heute drei Mal so stark wie von Österreich nach China.
Die Chinesen fahren eine aggressive Preispolitik. "Da wirkt sich auch eine Anti-Dumping-Steuer von 20 oder 30 Prozent auf Schuhe nicht sehr wesentlich aus", so der Handelsdelegierte in Peking. Chinesische Marktoffensiven seien auch auf dem Automobilsektor zu erwarten. Schon heute ist China der zweitgrößte Hersteller der Welt. "Heuer werden dort rund 6,4 Millionen Fahrzeuge produziert", betont Müllauer und appelliert an die österreichischen Automobilzulieferer, sich diesen Markt verstärkt anzuschauen.
Für Österreich durchwegs positiv gestaltet sich die Handelsbilanz mit Australien. Die Exporte dorthin legten im ersten Halbjahr 2006 um gut 18 Prozent auf 278 Mio. Euro zu. Die Importe aus Australien lagen bei nur 39 Mio. Euro (plus 46 Prozent). Die heimischen Unternehmen profitieren vom Bergbau-Boom und vom zunehmenden Wohlstand auf dem Kontinent. Stark nachgefragt sind dort die Leistungen der heimischen Bahnbaufirmen für die Erzzüge und die österreichische Biotechnologie, aber auch traditionelle Industrie- und Luxusgüter. Besonders gute Chancen attestiert der Handelsdelegierte in Sydney, Roman Rauch, der heimischen Wasser-Branche. Australien sei der trockenste Kontinent der Welt und leide vielerorts an Wassermangel. (APA)
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The articel in question, published on www.derstandard.at on 5 September, 2006 focuses on issues related to the balance of trade with Asia expecially with China. Specifically it gives an historically overview of the increasing import and export with China. First, the author points out that China is the forth largest supplier of goods like mobile phones, toys, cameras and shoes. Second, he shows that the commodity flow from China to Austria is three times larger than from Austria to China. Third, he maintains that China has a very aggressive pricing policy and as a result of this policy they will also increase their exports of cars. Aside from this main topic, the author also discusses the positive development of the trade balance with Australia. In summary, therefore, the article shows the reader that the Austrian export and import companies should focus more on China.
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The article in question, published on www.derstandard.at on 5 September, 2006, focuses on issues related to the balance of trade with Asia, expecially with China. Specifically, it gives an historical overview of the increasing level ofimports from and exports to China. First, the author points out that China is the fourth largest supplier of goods like mobile phones, toys, cameras and shoes. Second, he shows that the commodity flow from China to Austria is three times larger than from Austria to China. Third, he maintains that China has a very aggressive pricing policy and as a result of this policy, it will also increase its exports of cars. Aside from this main topic, the author also discusses the positive development of the Austrian trade balance with Australia. In summary, therefore, the article shows the reader that Austrian exporters and importers should focus more on China.
Gut strukturiert und die Rechtschreibfehler waren vermutlich eher Tippfehler (z.B. ist "article" unten wieder richtig buchstabiert). Insgesamt würde ich inhaltlich in der Zusammenfassung noch etwas mehr auf die Dynamik der China-Exporte eingehen (z.B. "The author emphasizes the double-digit growth of Chinese exports and China's increasingly dominant role in context of international trade.")
1) "Third, he maintains that China has a very aggressive pricing policy and as a result of this policy they will also increase their exports of cars.":Achtung!Bei Ländern kannst Du (wenn nicht "United" dabei steht) grundsätzlich davon ausgehen, dass es sich um den Singular handelt. Das gleiche gilt für Unternehmen (selbst mit "United" oder "s" am Ende)!Bearbeitet von: GerhardFenkart am: 9/18/06 12:49
I have a couple of questions..
1. Why did you correct "steadily rose" but not "steadily drifted" in one of the postings? Is it only a special case with the verb rise?
2. Does it make a difference whether we use "were attributable" and "were accounted for by" or "are attributable" and "are accounted for by"? Is it ok to use both in one interpretation or should we stick to one tense (I suppose..)? very helpful this thread, thanks a lot!
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In his article in “Die Presse“ of September 14th, Michael Pichlmair illustrates the concept of “guerrilla advertising”. Specifically, he gives the reader examples from the mobile communication sector where two companies have already used this form of alternative advertising and points out some advantages and disadvantages in regards to its application in practice. The first example deals with tele.ring’s faked street demonstration by the “Speck” against the new tele.ring rate. But also the competitor mobilkom used a guerrilla campaign – also a staged street demonstration against the own new rate. On the one hand, those guerrilla campaigns have quite profitable advantages: they are cheap and attract attention easily. But on the other hand they are often confusing for the potential clients. Aside from this topic, the author also discusses the numerous law suits that are continuously filed in the mobile communication sector. Ultimately, the article shows that new and creative forms of advertising are effective by all means but it is important to be aware that they might be misinterpreted and that the initiator risks legal consequences.
The article taken from “Die Presse“ deals with progressive ideas concerning the remuneration of workers. Industry representatives as well as an advisor of the chancellor demand more flexible remuneration systems and bonus systems based on a company’s profit in order to motivate workers and employees. Their idea is that basic guidelines should be fixed during the collective bargaining rounds in every industry, while bonus systems should be decided on autonomously by the companies. The labor unions are against theses proposals because they fear a decrease in wages. The ideas will first be discussed during the wage round of the metal industry, starting on September 27th. The outcomes of these collective bargaining rounds are awaited anxiously because they might be able to describe the prevailing attitudes in many other industries. Therefore, it is important to await the results of the first of all bargaining rounds to draw further conclusions as far as the acceptance of the proposed remuneration system is concerned. Bearbeitet von: intern am: 9/21/06 13:34
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